It's a bit cleaner, and I think it has some story potential now..
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Rosy dawn brightened the blue of the sky as she cracked her dark eyes open..
For the first time that she could recall, she eyed the massive, colorful domes with something like contentment. They were within easy view of the small broken alley she claimed as her own. The building beneath them was huge and looming: an ancient beast of solid structure somehow safely restrained behind numerous blocky adobe arches.
She watched the thing warily as she stretched, then shambled from the nest of shattered pipes and onto the cracked pavement that kissed the alley entrance. She allowed herself to enjoy the simple warmth of the sun gracing the soles of her bare feet, mind blissfully blank.
"Jaboozi!!"
She whirled about at the shrill high voice. She saw a single, tiny, chubby finger, attached to and equally tiny, chubby hand pointed in her direction. The lone child it belonged to looked at her wide-eyed in wonder, drool and spittle flowing down the chubby face unheeded.
"There you are.. " a woman rushed over and covered the child in a sweeping embrace. "Come on.. You scared mommy."
"Jaboozi..!" the child said again. The child's hand stretched out for a longing moment, then abruptly lowered as her bright eyes were instantly captured by something else.
"So sorry, I hope she didn't bother you...miss..?" The mother said dismissively while patting the child's back. Her pale orbs flicked her way, then fully focused on her, as if really seeing her for the first time. For that unmissed glance, those eyes were weighty with disgust.
'Jaboozi' fidgeted under the mother's scrutiny and straightened the ragged remains of her far-from-fine garments. The gaze disturbed her greatly, vaguely raising the notion that the mother and child had to be the mean ones that must always be avoided. She ducked her head low, absently pawing at the large dark stain upon her front as she turned abruptly about.
Sent via a stray supercharged nano particle of unobtainium....
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